Lora Leigh - Collision Point
Feb 28, 2018 21:04:52 GMT -7
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Post by diane on Feb 28, 2018 21:04:52 GMT -7
Collision Point
Just read this last night. I have avoided LL's books lately because I find them repetitive and poor quality. This upholds that tradition. I generally find with LL's books that there is a feeling of being dumped into the middle of the story and the background very, very slowly gets revealed and I don't have the patience for that anymore. The basic premise is ok however, the H is the (basically) brother of one of LL's other heroes - Nathan Malone or Noah as we are repeatedly reminded, from Wild Card. He is in this as well and just about every single time he appears, there is a brief but extremely repetitive recap of Wild Card. Including repeating both his names over and over again. There were at least 3 occasions where Wild Card is recapped for anyone who hasn't read it. There could have been more but after the third, I started to skip the parts that he was in so it was probably mentioned a few more times (Nathan Malone goes on mission, dies, returns as Noah, reunites with long suffering, despairing wife Sabella). That is said pretty much every time Noah makes an appearance which he unfortunately does a lot. So you have a lot of him and a lot of sex scenes. Really really repetitive sex scenes. Seriously if I had to read the words mushroom head one more time I would have tossed my precious Kindly out the window. And now I don't like mushrooms anymore. Honestly I can't remember the h's name, probably because I was reminded of Noah and Sabella so much, but she has a creeptastic dad who goes out of his way to ensure his baby girl is pure and virginal and doesn't even know what a mushroom head is. Of course, none of his elaborate and icky plans succeed because, hey hot guy! The climax (ha!) of the story is so convoluted and makes no sense at all but at least this is over. There were the bare bones (ha! Seriously I'm a 12 year old boy.) of a good story here but holy crap where is your editor LL!! I don't know if there is a necessary word count or what but how about more thought to the story (which is what your editor should be saying) and cutting down on the mushrooms just a bit? Thanks.
Just read this last night. I have avoided LL's books lately because I find them repetitive and poor quality. This upholds that tradition. I generally find with LL's books that there is a feeling of being dumped into the middle of the story and the background very, very slowly gets revealed and I don't have the patience for that anymore. The basic premise is ok however, the H is the (basically) brother of one of LL's other heroes - Nathan Malone or Noah as we are repeatedly reminded, from Wild Card. He is in this as well and just about every single time he appears, there is a brief but extremely repetitive recap of Wild Card. Including repeating both his names over and over again. There were at least 3 occasions where Wild Card is recapped for anyone who hasn't read it. There could have been more but after the third, I started to skip the parts that he was in so it was probably mentioned a few more times (Nathan Malone goes on mission, dies, returns as Noah, reunites with long suffering, despairing wife Sabella). That is said pretty much every time Noah makes an appearance which he unfortunately does a lot. So you have a lot of him and a lot of sex scenes. Really really repetitive sex scenes. Seriously if I had to read the words mushroom head one more time I would have tossed my precious Kindly out the window. And now I don't like mushrooms anymore. Honestly I can't remember the h's name, probably because I was reminded of Noah and Sabella so much, but she has a creeptastic dad who goes out of his way to ensure his baby girl is pure and virginal and doesn't even know what a mushroom head is. Of course, none of his elaborate and icky plans succeed because, hey hot guy! The climax (ha!) of the story is so convoluted and makes no sense at all but at least this is over. There were the bare bones (ha! Seriously I'm a 12 year old boy.) of a good story here but holy crap where is your editor LL!! I don't know if there is a necessary word count or what but how about more thought to the story (which is what your editor should be saying) and cutting down on the mushrooms just a bit? Thanks.
